Tuesday, September 13, 2011

Cross Country

Before giving a burst of speed I was so scared, I felt sick. I began taking deep breaths.

Eagerly waiting for Pt England’s Cross Country to start, I was nervous. I wanted to beat Jabez. As Mr Burt said "On your marks, get set, go!!" I charged so I could stay at the front.
Despite my nerves. I said to myself "You can do it".

During the race it was very hard to stay on the path, as it was narrow and twisted and turned all over the place. Sometimes I had to go off the track, onto the grass, to be able to pass people. My heart pounded as fast as a machine to get blood to my screaming lungs.

Towards the end of the race, I knew that I was in front. I challenged myself to not let anyone pass me. Digging deep to find my energy, I charged towards the finish line.

Approaching my ultimate goal, I sprinted like a chicken to collapse over the line - victorious! I had beaten Jabez and won the Cross Country for the second time since I have been at school!

I felt so proud of myself for surpassing my expectations and getting my champion’s title. Bring on next year!


  1. Wow, son! Brilliant writing, dynamic picture and fantastic result in coming first... You really are a champion! Keep looking up.
    Love Mum

  2. Hello Levi! I love your piece of writing. Well done for coming first! I really liked how you used interesting vocab and added extra detail into your writing. Can't wait to read your next post.

  3. Wow Levi I like your picture. What an Interesting Story that you wrote. Keep up the good work!

  4. Hi Levi! I really like your piece of writing about your cross Country race. I really like the way you use very interesting words that tells me more on haw you were very tired. Can't wait to read your next blog post.
    Keep up the great writing

  5. Hello levi! I love your blog writing and the interesting words you put in to your blog. Nice work coming first in your cross country race. I came 6th place In cross country.

  6. Wow Levi I like your picture and your work. I like the paragraph and the writing too. Keep up the great work bye

  7. Hi Levi
    I really enjoyed reading your story. You have great sentence beginnings. Well done for coming 1st.
    keep up your good work and have a great day!!!
    By sesalina

  8. Hello Levi I really like your story about Cross Country. You must be so happy being in 1st place. I also like your story it has interesting sentences and vocab. Keep up the good work. Cant wait to see your next post but I'm hoping it is going to be an awesome one just like this one. I hope that you will come see my blog have a goo afternoon.

    From Dante Bartlett
    Room 16


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